Despair

[muckyduck]

Swirling black clouds surround my head
No emotions, thoughts are dead
Deep in the abyss, my body lies
No struggling now, just close my eyes

muckyduck

[GrimDad]

Hi muckyduck, I do like your brief 'Despair'.
It strikes me that it could be sung, as a good intro to a song like 'Black Is Black' maybe.

[muckyduck]

we could be on to something ill write the words you write the music ha maybe this is how elton and bernie started

[enigma]

interesting to not that if the title 'despair' was changed or removed, this could also be a short piece about a sense of oneness and passive serenity with the universe. like it in the sense you ave put it across also though.